Margaret Louise

On the contrary, Bolt, I think this is a brilliant poem. The "nonsense" of it does have a point, as explained in the final line. It's innovations like this that ...

I really really liked this poem. The only thing that might be changed is the breaks in the lines. Like the first one, I wonder if you don't want to ...

I really liked this, but it's strangely vague. Particularly the first couple lines: Every ten seconds my reborn shadow fades, taking a little bit of me with it. It's obvious ...

I agree with the above reviewer. Often, the first drafts of a poem are very rough. The best way to dig deeper is to keep writing. Write every word or ...

After reading your story, I have the feeling I very rarely get, after putting down a spent book after days of being hooked between the pages, and very often that ...

First off, welcome to YWS! Now, let's get reviewing. I liked the repetition and overall tone of this poem, but it could be longer and more detailed. You switch so ...

I loved this. The gothic imagery and the "forbidden romance" aspect of it. Some things confused me, though. Is this angel a good or evil being? It would seem he ...

GREAT! Great, great job. The brilliant simplicity of it, the imagery, the abrupt ending. Loved it! I loved that the man had to scramble for his few coins just to ...

WHY did you do this to me? I saw the Part Two and figured I would go back and read part 1, and let me tell you, I am a ...

Whoa. That story hit me like a ton of bricks. Amazing, amazing emotion. A few things though, and I'm sorry for being nitpicky! The sky was amazing crystal, clear blue ...

Hey there! Good poem, the title caught my eye right off the bat. It's delightfully metaphorical. I agree with stargazer9927 about it feeling like a "teenager poem" but that's not ...

Hello Hero! Great job, this was a haunting and beautifully written poem. I absolutely loved the first two stanzas, especially the description of the giant, and how it is only ...

First off, I loved the first line Sorry out of politeness. I have a question, though, are you apologising to just the one person, or is each stanza a different ...

Hahaha, this is hilarious. So simple, so fresh and funny. I haven't read "Roberto" but now I definitely will. Just a couple things first, "steel" is misspelled in line 3, ...

Wow. The emotion displayed in this piece really tore me up. That being said, I think you have a great piece here. Ironically, it does have a few minor mistakes. ...